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Kimberly

This comment is not for the group essay it is for your photo album, which I noticed you forgot to put an entry for.

On one note, I will just let you know that you spelled 'reader' wrong in all of your groups cites for the last essay...Just wondering if you knew that...

Moving right along...I would like to say that this is the hardest blog I have had to comment on yet. I really enjoyed your photo album and I think that you picked a really ineresting and well researched topic.


I noticed that your citations seemed to be a little out of format, but then again whose were? In any case I think a little help with citing will fix that. I was not able to retrace your steps though, which put a damper on my excitement over the excellent form of this blog.


I think the only other real bone I'd like to pick about your blog is about your thesis. It is hard to prove that someone is competent, and I did not know exactly what you were trying to show the reader with that thesis. What I mean is that you need a stronger, more stable and proveable thesis statement.


In any case, I really enjoyed your blog and I think that this was the best photo album I have looked at yet. Great job.

Kath Henshaw

This comment pertains to blog #7, not blog #8. I could not find a place to add my comment to your photo album so I am putting it here. Again, this comment has nothing to do with the jury blog but I couldn’t find anywhere else to put it so you could see my comment!

Congratulations on the creation of your first photo album blog. It is evident that you spent a good deal of time on your blog because the writing portion was well thought out and very informative. I think that you chose appropriate pictures for the assignment; however, I don’t think you took full advantage of what you were working with. Your blog could have been improved if you had drawn the reader’s attention to something in the picture that he or she would have otherwise missed. Also, the pictures in the photo albums are supposed to be visually appealing and prove the thesis. I can tell that you tried to do this but, in future blogs, you may want to make more of an effort to fully utilize your visuals. In your introduction you break into first person by using the words “our” and “us.” It is important to remember that blogs should remain in third person. In order to stay away from plagiarism, it is important that you use citations indicating where you got your pictures and facts from. Citations are lacking throughout your assignment. Even so, I enjoyed reading your blog.

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Alfred Waud

  • 5:  At the End of the Journey
    In the entire history of the United States of America, there has been no greater tragedy than the Civil War. No natural disaster, act of terrorism, or other war even comes close to the incredible significance of the inhabitants of our blossoming country fighting against and killing one another. While countless literary works document this key period in the history of our nation, it is the images that present to us the most bold and stunning portrayals of the war. With the invention of photography came shocking images with content that had never been witnessed before; however, these images were not nearly so interesting as the way the war was portrayed by artists who actually witnessed the battle take place. One sketch artist, Alfred Waud, is perhaps the most well known of all the artists from this period. Alfred Waud was a competent sketch artist during the Civil War Era, traveling with Union troops and illustrating for Harper’s Weekly and other popular newspapers during the final half of the 19th century. http://loc.gov